One of the highly controversial issues today relates to that of athletes and their impact to adolescents. While some people believe that sport persons are efficient role models, some others feel the oppose. In the following essay I would shade some light on both these views and then give my opinion on the matter.
Since the ancient age people adore athletes, their physique, performance and passion. Athletes are the prime example of a generally known true that everything is possible. Every day professional sport persons breaking world records and pushing barriers even further. Pupils and teenagers in this modern era, who are more likely playing computer games or drinking alcohol could be encourage to perform a sport activity and follow their icons. For instance, my friend who have been obese in primary school adored watching swimming at Olympic games. Followed his icon Micheal Phelps, he become a professional swimmer and won many competitions.
On the other hand, with everywhere increasing impact of social media, professional athletes more often represent not only sport, but also commercial products. As far as young generation follow their sport stars, chance of purchasing unnecessary goods, which their favourite sport person represent is very high. For example, in Spain, after commercial advertise with Christian Ronaldo drinking Coca-Cola, sales rapidly increased and sold out the stock in many parts in Spain.
To sum up, publicly known sport individuals might encourage young generation to perform any kind of sport activity, however, they could also negatively impact them by representing commercial products. In my opinion, I believe that professional athletes have a positive impact to young generation and their public presence and performance outweigh a drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...efficient role models, some others feel the oppose. In the following essay I would shade s...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'performing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: performing
... or drinking alcohol could be encourage to perform a sport activity and follow their icons...
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Line 7, column 348, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a drawback' or simply 'drawbacks'?
Suggestion: a drawback; drawbacks
...ublic presence and performance outweigh a drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, then, while, for example, for instance, kind of, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50902527076 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72634174415 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657039711191 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0780340936 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177781315478 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632032148265 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660705581494 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121185897996 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871046513865 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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