In today’s time, there is a great deal of suggestions being made to the study program for students and the subjects included therein. While some propose that the science and preparation of food should be added in courses, others insist on giving priority to more important subjects. Personally, I side with the latter view.
On the one hand, there are certain benefits to be gained from the study of food. Firstly, scientific knowledge about food encourages students to take a health-conscious approach to their diet. Because when students understand how food constituents like proteins, fats, carbohydrates, affect their physical condition, they may become more willing to adopt a balanced diet in preference to fast food. Also, food science entails the study of preparation methods that guide students towards food safety. Specifically, students can learn about the proper way of treating food, like dehydrating or freezing, as well as how to preserve and contain them appropriately to prevent bacterial growth. This, in turns, will minimize risks of foodborne illness.
On the other hand, I believe that students’ time should be dedicated to the learning of main subjects. The primary goal of school education should be to prepare students for one pivotal end that is the university entrance exam. This means placing more emphasis on core subjects like Math, Literature and English, which are practical subjects for evaluating students’ performance. Furthermore, it is likely that food science would only be introduced as a side-subject and account for one session in students’ weekly timetable. In other words, student’s engagement will be at a minimum, thereby limiting the subject’s applicability.
In conclusion, despite the several benefits offered by the incorporation of food science into students’ curriculum, I am still of the opinion that students should devote their time mainly to core subjects
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Suggestion:
...foodborne illness. On the other hand, I believe that students’ time should be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48657718121 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02208922556 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604026845638 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7100501874 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381049040856 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127979990132 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773218841448 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242779651535 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056266304529 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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