Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination Others think money and appearance are more important Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is true that people have a lot of ways to achieve success in their life. While some people think money and appearance are two factors affecting to people's success, I would argue that people can reach a peak of their career when they work hard and have determination.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why finance and physical beauty are important contributors to success in life. First reason is that money enables people reaching their deep desires like power and frame. For example, if people have a great deal of money, they have countless opportunities to progress rapidly in their career or being well-known in the community that they desired. Furthermore, personal appearance is one of the crucial factors impacting achievement. For instance, it would be a good chance for candidates to seek a job if they indicate their confident body posture or wearing clothing apart from great skills and experiences.

On the other hand, it is undeniable that hard working and resolution are necessary features which are pivotal to ensure success. Firstly, hard work helps people gain some valuable experiences in aspects of life. For example, if young student practices several times some kinds of assignment in college and home, they are likely to minimize the risk of repeating the same mistakes so they have the tendency to get high scores in the formal exam. Secondly, determination gives us the motivation to set up goals which become the foundation of success. As a result, this is an essential skill to allow people overcome the complex problems in all situation and always keep moving forward to reach the long-term goals.

In conclusion, although money and personal appearance have an influence on achievement, it seems to me that hard work and resolution are dominant factors to get the highest achievement.

Votes
Average: 8 (102 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...appearance are two factors affecting to peoples success, I would argue that people can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07284768212 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73296583081 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569536423841 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0115310668 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.846153846 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252160475091 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903965518132 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773432805714 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159563305717 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817342496344 0.056905535591 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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