Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination Others think money and appearance are more important Discuss both views and give your opinion

People often say that one can achieve success through sheer grit and strength of will while others believe that physical beauty and being rich are more crucial. I strongly support that, pleasure of achieving goals by striving a lot is more when compared to that of being rich and looking good.

Individuals who spend most of their time on work and strive very hard will finally lead to success. It is also observed that they will enjoy the process of the work and are always ready for the challenges that arise in that path. For example, many inventors and scientists struggled a lot without losing hope on their goals finally achieved success, as a result those achievements brought them money and recognition which will last for years. Making extra efforts and trusting one's will power definitely works in favor.

On the other hand, some people argue that financial stability and fancied appearance are more crucial. But, I believe it may not have significant impact on life as they end up aimless and life will be less interesting for them. For example, few people spends a lot, just to look good and serves no other purpose. Eventually they may get the materialistic happiness but not the pleasure of success.

It can be concluded that, although few people think being rich and appearing good is vital, by making good efforts and focusing on the work without any deviations will bring good fortunes. Success earned through struggle and determination is more enjoyable than the materialistic happiness.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, look, may, so, while, for example, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1245.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9209486166 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49020013669 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569169960474 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 253.0 20.2975951904 1246% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1245.0 106.682146367 1167% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 253.0 20.7667163134 1218% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 89.0 7.06120827912 1260% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191486008401 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191486008401 0.084324248473 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117169961948 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342571338742 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 128.2 13.0946893788 979% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -176.86 50.2224549098 -352% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 100.8 11.3001002004 892% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.74 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 19.49 8.58950901804 227% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 9.78957915832 531% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 103.2 10.1190380762 1020% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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