Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion
Questions of the key to success have always been a controversial topic in recent decades. Although the proposal of money and appearance sounds legitimate, I’m the proponent of hard work and dedication.
On the one hand, there are many reasons why money and external beauty could determine our success. First, Individuals with high financial muscles could get high positions in a specific organization by means of bribery. In fact, many ministers have a penchant for paying the bride for other corrupted official authorities in the constitution to get elected for the president. Second, Young people with charming external appearance could have extramarital affairs with those having high social influence to climb the career ladders. For example, many singers in Vietnam get involved in romantic relationships with other real estate moguls to sign more advertisement contracts with famous brands, promoting their popularity and coverage in the entertainment industry.
On the other hand, it should be acknowledged that hard work and dedication is the true key to success in life. First, Hard work is invariably associated with work commitments and dedication on a higher platform, thereby ensuring better career prospects with many promotion opportunities. Second, individuals with high determination would endeavour to complete the assigned projects with high efficiency and get their shortcomings in work experience perfected, which is instrumental in their social mobility.
In conclusion, hard work and dedication could culminate in the success of individuals. Financial power and external appearance could ensure people’s high positions in society but not guarantee the long-term sustainability.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Young) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...lected for the president. Second, Young people with charming external appearance could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80632411067 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1480668847 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577075098814 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.379473429 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.416666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143937007509 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660321630355 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052141751608 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104088054854 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245960581366 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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