Some people think that technology is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think the opposite. Discuss both views and give your own opinion."
Whether technology is widening the gap between wealthy people and the impoverished remains a contentious topic. Both these schools of thought hold valid arguments. This essay will take both sides into consideration and give my verdict.
On the one hand, I do think that some state-of-the-art facilities are often exorbitant and unaffordable for people living below the poverty line. For example, the average monthly income per person in Vietnam in 2020 is approximately 351 dollars, compared to the average price of a low quality refrigerator there which is around 191 dollars. Consequently, a small quantity of the impoverished do not possess a proper financial ability to buy it. By contrast, the rich can easily purchase up-to-date technology for having lucrative income. This would partly worsen the gap between wealthy people and the impoverished as rich people could utilize modern technology to accomplish their work easily while a number of poor ones who, for instance, do not know computer skills, retain being in the blue collar with low wages.
On the other hand, despite the fact that some technological devices are often unaffordable for the poor, I hold a strong belief that both the privileged and the underprivileged can take advantage of technological developments. Initially, by purchasing and utilizing electronic devices, almost every individual would curb the amount of time spent on household chores. For example, with the aid of a washing machine, washing clothes in general is almost no longer a manual work, thus it is time-saving, more efficient, and humans can channel their time into other indispensable things. Besides, technology is not only a means for the rich to make money but it can also provide them with the capability to offer jobs for poor people. Take some of the billionaires, namely Mark Zuckerberg, who is the founder of Facebook - a popular social website, as an illustration. His website has created countless online jobs, such as selling clothes or marketing, which contributes to cutting poverty.
In conclusion, although the high prices of some technological devices can act as a deterrent to lessening the gap between the rich and the poor, I concur that technology is decreasing this gap as both the privileged and the underprivileged can take advantage of technological developments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30376344086 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11112808173 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572580645161 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2343524239 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.533333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245066728364 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740533399159 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068554022401 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16038598975 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416393388871 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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