Some people think teenagers should do unpaid work to help society because this will help them become better citizens and also improve the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this proposal?
There are some opinions show that teenage kids should do volunteer work to both develop themselves and also make the society better. Personally, I partially agree with this view.
It is clear that unpaid works benefit teenagers both in mental and physical. Research shows that helping with other people can reduce anxiety, depression and bring happiness. They can meet new friends, strengthen existing relationships, thereby gain more social experiences. Volunteering also means try out different jobs, which can help post-graduate students to enhance their career experiences and become more independent. For instances, working in Hanoi Volunteer Club - an organization that usually create a tour for their members to help poor and elderly people around Hanoi or highland area, which allow them to connect with other people and increasing social experiences.
On the other hand, unpaid works also have some negative effects. Most young people are under pressure with their studies at school and homework. Their spare time needs to have more fun, by playing games or doing sports, instead of going to work as an adult. This could lead to overload and stress if they can not balancing their time between studying and working.
In conclusion, although doing volunteer works can bring lots of benefits to young people and the society, in my opinion, they should not let these works interrupt their studies at school before graduating.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'balance'
Suggestion: balance
... to overload and stress if they can not balancing their time between studying and working...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1215.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35242290749 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59442707782 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.660792951542 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 350.1 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4100141284 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.25 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271379958941 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992019699819 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617388379833 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176581188517 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860523072053 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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