Many ex-criminals become normal and productive members of the society after being released from prison. Therefore, some people believe that having a talk with them is the effective way tto help children more aware of the riskings commiting crime. Personally, while I accept this practice is benefical, I believe that there are many better measures of crime prevention.
On the one hand, it cannot be denied that there are certain benefits of holding a conversation between ex-offenders and students at school. In the first place, there used-to-be prisoners might tell young people about how they became involved in crime and even what a prisoner suffers after after perpetrating a crime. Thus, this approach is more detailed as adolescents can learn about things that do not exist in textbooks. In addition, through stories which come from first-hand experience, ex-offenders can be considered as good examples to help them get insight into the world of crime. As a result, after attending this crime session, they will become more concern about the importance of following the laws.
Nevertherless, “ ex-prisoners” conversations alone could not be regarded as the most optimal way as the ideal one is too fuse this with other effective approaches. Firstly, criminal courts should be proadcast live on TV and social mdia. The scence of criminals such as going trail, standing at the bar and carrying penalties would cause them to realise that following these evil-doers ‘ footsteps will lead them to bear the similar consequences. Additionally, from educational perspective, many schools offer a wide range of extra- curricular activities in which students are taught criminology through criminal films. Therefore, this practice are more attractive to students and have greater influence on their minds.
In conclusion, although talks by ex-prisoners are of good values to school students, there are stronger crime-prevention methods such as criminal courts and extra-curricular activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52750809061 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06412169456 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621359223301 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6575757552 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227112922781 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723737468691 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704208271463 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137004150566 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508324171381 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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