Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree of disgree?
When talking about the perfect age for retirement, residents all around the world show several paradoxical opinions. One groups believe that “longer life means longer working time” so raising the working-age to few more years is completely a reasonable choice while the others indicate a different vision. In my point of view, longer longevity may not be enough to become the reason to increase much more working-hours.
To make it clearer, we can take a look at one study from Stanford University which shows that people with higher income tend to live longer. It is understandable because rich people are the one meeting all the conditions to afford medical exorbitant services and cutting-edge machines which affect directly to their health. Meanwhile, people in lower and working class who work as manual labors may not have a chance to access this services widely. Longer working time may attributed to many diseases of oldness.
Oldness may not be brutal for elderly but loneliness may. It could be the reason behind the death of someone and sadly this is one of the most prevalent reason when somebody decide to end up their life. We people dedicate merely half of our life for working, making money, contributing to local economy and tons of no-name jobs everyday and suddenly forget about our fundamental part of life, family. People at higher age like out grandparents and parents have a penchant for gathering, reuniting, relaxing and spending their precious time with beloved one. Raising the retirement age may narrow down the amount of time which they could spend for their family.
In conclusion, I believe adding few more years of working is not a suitable policy even when our longevity could be longer. In other word, not every contribution is worth your health and time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: too
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Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... local economy and tons of no-name jobs everyday and suddenly forget about our fundament...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, while, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10067114094 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64367561642 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61744966443 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4869276832 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.571428571 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227994124933 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773098176574 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460012066188 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132406981539 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608132714421 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.