some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably To what extent do you agree or disagree
Since the average life expectancy of individuals has raised significantly when compares to the last few decades, there are several people who believe that the retirement age should be increased as well. From my perspective, I found no justification for supporting such a statement
To begin with, there is a variety of explanations against raising the age at which people retired from work. For the most part, one reason is really stand out is this will, by some means, disrupting the work-life balance of one individual. The current retirement age is allegedly an ideal period for one to relinquish and to devote all their time to tighten the family bonding. By increasing the retired age requirement, these senior citizens are less likely to have valuable memories with their spouse and offsprings. Nevertheless, there may be some arguments that people these days can live much longer, therefore, it is nothing to worry about. As for myself, I wonder this bears much analysis since it is undeniable that when people turn into the elderly, they will not be able to fully enjoy life with their children due to the inadequate health condition
Another reason that is worth considering comes from that fact that increasing the retirement age will depriving young people of employment opportunities. It is irrefutable that the expertise, along with the abundance in practical experience, of senior workers is completely outperformed that of new graduates. Therefore, they will unintentionally take away the opportunity to gain the occupation of their junior colleagues. This not only intensifies the unemployment rates and force young people to do unspecialized jobs but also hinder the growth of one company or, furthermore, the economy due to lack of creativity and innovation from young employees
In conclusion, the retirement age should not be raised as it will result in life-work imbalance as well as take away the job opportunities from creative and innovative graduates
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'deprive'
Suggestion: deprive
...that increasing the retirement age will depriving young people of employment opportunitie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, well, as for, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30599369085 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03247293272 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589905362776 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.049787606 49.4020404114 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.2 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295849796059 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108722411737 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849322926321 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176124808527 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510228452838 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.0946893788 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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