Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued by some that the retirement age should be increased since people are living longer than before. In the author's perspective, people should not retire at an older age for several reasons which are mentioned in the essay.
The first and foremost that should be mentioned is the effectivity on productivity. Many old workers have a variety of health problems such as backache, poor memory or impaired vision, which prevents them from working with high productivity. Working at such poor capacity is ought to be a difficult circumstance to work efficiently due to the slower reflexes, reducing their full potential making it a poor comparison from their prime. Moreover, not only did it reduce their capacity but also damaging their mental state because of the pressure of continuous working status. They suffer illness due to the overpressure of their minds when weakened in the cause of aging, then leading to the occurrence of depression, obesity from emotional eating to cope with their work, and constant breakdowns
In addition, one of the culprits of why the authority should not increase the retirement age is that retirement is also the objective motivation to encourage younger generations to pursue higher status in their workplace. A labour leaving their position to retire is an opportunity for younger workers to achieve higher success . A research done in Harvard University indicates when the passed labor force retires, 80% of the youth will have more chances in getting a higher position in their work environment which will grant them various welfare involving their income, quality of life and most importantly their mental state. Therefore will create a competitive environment and improve the working productivity. Moreover, retirement is also a chance for people to enjoy their offspring after dedicated working time. People will have time to enjoy their welfare and pursue their dreams.
In conclusion, the author strongly believes that the adjustment of retirement age is unnecessary since it will negatively affect the working productivity and also the opportunity to promote the younger generation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e are living longer than before. In the authors perspective, people should not retire a...
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Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ounger workers to achieve higher success . A research done in Harvard University i...
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Line 5, column 630, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...nd most importantly their mental state. Therefore will create a competitive environment a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34319526627 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83324388429 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541420118343 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.74315033 49.4020404114 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 138.923076923 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227841489474 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995722892587 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807747013655 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165685289486 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111866947634 0.056905535591 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.