Sports today is turning into a business with many companies involved and ever growing prize money for the sportsmen Do you think it is positive or negative development

Nowadays, sports are doing an effective marketing owing to the involvement of lots of companies and the large sums of money being paid for athletes. Even though for many, sports are gradually converting to a trade, this type of culture remains a true development. This essay will support my opinion with relevant examples by discussing initially the positive aspect and secondly the negative aspect of sports sponsorship.

On the one hand, generally speaking, the main positive facet of subsidising sports is that both sponsors and sportsmen benefit substantially. While an organisation usually rea...

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Average: 8.1 (7 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59940652819 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20392065379 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643916913947 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4835896184 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.8 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192600697815 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577804176152 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520532552845 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120291246937 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583037554907 0.056905535591 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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flaws:
1. the third paragraph is not right on the topic. need to talk: too much involvement of business in sports will ruin the true spirit of sports.

2. examples are too long. try to make one or two sentence for one example, but make one more reason, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: idea one. first, example 1.....second....example 2
para 3: however, idea two. first, example 1 ...second...example 2
para 4: in my opinion...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1831 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.433 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.095 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.907 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5