Subjects such as Art Sport and Music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects such as Information Technology Many people children suffer as a result of these changes To what extent would you support or reject the idea of moving these subjects.
The advent of technology had a profound impact on the people living on earth. Information technology is one of the branches in technology that is related to software. Information technology is growing leaps and bounds spreading across the world. Information technology is revolutionizing the modern world by making people's lives better, be it the way people communicate or be it shopping from home on a computer. Information technology is the future and people should invest in it to have a good future. In my opinion, I support adding Information Technology as a subject in the curriculum at school.
Adding information technology as a subject will be helpful for the children in lower-income families. Poor families cannot afford to send their children for training on Information technology related software as the training on the software is expensive and the families are not willing to spend. Lower-income families would want to meet their daily needs instead of spending on information technology training. As a result, kids of these families are deprived of information technology and school is the only place where they get a chance to have hands-on experience on software. Adding information technology as a subject is a boon for these kids as they can get good training and eventually choose information technology as their career.
Art, sport and music have several benefits for the children. Firstly, they foster teamwork among children which is an important skill required for today's workforce. Children collaborate with each other and share their ideas on design and building a product. Secondly, art instills detail orientedness in children. Drawing a human picture requires the kid to know the dimensions of the person, the facial expressions of the person, and the person's physique. Finally, artwork helps children to imagine. Kids imagine a scene and brings it to the fore by drawing from their memory.
Information technology is where the future is and helping children with training at school will pave a good career for them.
- Studies show that, as we’ve become more technically advanced, our health has deteriorated rapidly. Heart disease, cancer, diabetes, and virtually every major ailment are far more common today than they were thirty years ago. The primary reason for this 58
- Studies show that as we ve become more technically advanced our health has deteriorated rapidly Heart disease cancer diabetes and virtually every major ailment are far more common today than they were thirty years ago The primary reason for this deteriora 68
- Studies show that, as we’ve become more technically advanced, our health has deteriorated rapidly. Heart disease, cancer, diabetes, and virtually every major ailment are far more common today than they were thirty years ago. The primary reason for this 41
- Studies show that, as we’ve become more technically advanced, our health has deteriorated rapidly. Heart disease, cancer, diabetes, and virtually every major ailment are far more common today than they were thirty years ago. The primary reason for this 83
- Subjects such as Art Sport and Music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects such as Information Technology Many people children suffer as a result of these changes To what extent would you support or reject the idea of moving these subj 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... and bounds spreading across the world. Information technology is revolutionizing the moder...
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Line 1, column 414, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...be it shopping from home on a computer. Information technology is the future and people sho...
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Line 5, column 440, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...cial expressions of the person, and the persons physique. Finally, artwork helps childr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, still, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27134146341 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96674853868 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493902439024 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9070969603 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2631578947 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301877020743 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997587576064 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628518787689 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170249769018 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521271501494 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.