While some people hold a belief that video records are the better way to learn people about life than written documents, others think the opposite. Although both of them have their merits, in my viewpoint, I firmly believe that the records of the video are more interesting and attractive way than the other one to learn how people live.
One of the main benefits video records bring to us is that they offer an authentic portrayal, a visual representation of their real-life, which can be more attention-grabbing than the written documents. Watching videos of somebody coming from diverse culture can help us eye-opening new traditions, thus applying their good advantage into our life. This would be very valuable for those who don’t have a chance to approach with the cultural variety lively. By seeing and understanding the other living through the video, we can easily make sense of their lifestyle and customs.
Another benefits of the records of video that it can take us to see or hear something that the documents can’t be written such as the emotions, tone of voice and body languauges that essential to some cultures so that it can enhance our undestaning in a deeply way. Set a yotuber coming from Vietnam, living in Angola in Africa. He is a rarely human take ages to live in black continent to explore and experience new culture and help poor inhabitant living in here to improve their live and shares to other people in the world through social media. When seeing his video, we can obviously witness villagers’s emotion and their exciting when experiencing better life day-to-day thanks to this Youtuber. Not only helping us with self-contained life, but also making sustainably friendship between Viet Nam and Angola.
In conclusion, I prefer video records than written documents about conveying information to people’s life because of its convinents. However, it should be considered from an critical eye to gain more deeper understanding about the diversity of the culture.
- The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany France Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005 67
- The use of social media e g Facebook and Twitter is replacing face to face contact for many people in thier everyday life Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantage 89
- The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014 78
- The table shows the amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries by charities in the US EU and other countries from 2006 to 2010 67
- Some people say that online learning is the most effective and convenient way to learn Others say that online learning will be never be as effective as learning at a real school in person Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...deo records are the better way to learn people about life than written documents, othe...
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Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('deeply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('way') instead of another adjective.
... that it can enhance our undestaning in a deeply way. Set a yotuber coming from Vietnam, liv...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riendship between Viet Nam and Angola. In conclusion, I prefer video records th...
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Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... However, it should be considered from an critical eye to gain more deeper unders...
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Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'deeper' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: deeper
...considered from an critical eye to gain more deeper understanding about the diversity of th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09393939394 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8080642758 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584848484848 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1204794558 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.307692308 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287174249296 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10791669436 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108802182287 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20410660277 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116211554289 0.056905535591 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.