These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, while more and more mothers like to take the role of breadwinners, fathers tend to watch for their children and do household chores. Although several reasons relating to this development, I think that it is a positive tendency.
There are some causes why changing roles more and more common in the present communities. Firstly, in the modern and equal right societies, men love to live with their children while women tend to open their relationship, so females want to become as the homemaker and pursue a career. Moreover, more and more jobs are creating to attract women, so they can easily find one and make more money than men. Secondly, because females have several soft skills, therefore, many corporations need more women than men in their workplace. For example, Vingroup that has more than 50 % of its employees who are females, is one of the most powerful and successful companies in Vietnam.
I think this tendency is a positive development in modern society. On the financial side, if women can make more money, they will have a more stable income which supports their family budgets. Besides, children can have an opportunity to make more connections with their fathers and grow more successful in their lives if males tend to stay at home and take childcare responsibilities. For example, in the research in 2010, in Japan, people who had great success in their fields because they used to live with their fathers from childhood.
In conclusion, I believe that it has several advantages in changing roles that fathers likely take the role as homemaker and take care of their children whose mothers tend to go out to work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 594, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...hat has more than 50 % of its employees who are females, is one of the most powerful an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93165467626 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66718690728 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543165467626 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2057209859 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.25 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331777871035 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12735947879 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784869697558 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231343725137 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769079396739 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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