There remains some disagreement as to whether products' success should be attributable solely to advertising hype rather than customers' demand. This issue, from my perspective, I contend that advertisements indeed have a significant influence on purchasers' selection, but they are not main reason.
First of all, for one thing, when faced with a bewildering variety of goods, we may be spoiled by choice. Advertisements, at this time, by which we are informed about the choice we have,play a irreplaceable part. We usually tend to select what have been displayed in adverts. For the another, Flashy adverts and bright packages are luring us on the account of glamorized appearance and quality of commodities. One salient example is goods specifically targeting children, such as fast food, which are marketed at a way that attracts children. Actually, pupils are easily influenced by slick adverts and adjust to pressurizing their parents into buying a pig in a poke.
Secondly, Certain companies often invite renowned and glamorous people to endorse their wares, which has successfully pointed their died-fans in the direction of buying something unnecessarily. Several consumers overly focus on a brand-image rather than the qualities and utilities of the commodities when they make a choice. So We have to admit that publicity seems to fulfill an essential function in products' success.
But conversely, also noteworthy is the fact that purchasers actually have absolute right to choose what they really need. When they are selecting goods, purchasing-power is of the essence and a pivotal influence. If they own no enough money, they will narrow the selection of merchandise they may buy. Another crucial impact is the qualities of goods. This is imperative and vital. On this account, adverting just let you access to information about a kind of goods, but not a decisive impact. In conclusion, I reaffirm my position that a company's wares should succeed by virtue of word-of-mouth, rather than a blaze of publicity.
- The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. 80
- Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree. 89
- Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are causes of global warming and measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issues? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from 84
- Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
There remains some disagreement as to whether products success should be attributable...
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Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve, I contend that advertisements indeed have a significantly influence on purcha...
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Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('significantly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('influence') instead of another adjective.
...ontend that advertisements indeed have a significantly influence on purchasers selection, but they are n...
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Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'purchasers'' or 'purchaser's'?
Suggestion: purchasers'; purchaser's
...deed have a significantly influence on purchasers selection, but they are not main reason...
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Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
...aced with a bewildering variety of goods,we may be spoiled by choice. At this time ...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e may be spoiled by choice. At this time , advertisements, which are a good approa...
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Line 3, column 770, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'pointed'.
Suggestion: pointed
...rse their wares, which has successfully point their died-fans in the direction of buy...
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Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , purchasers
...so noteworthy is the fact that, actually,purchasers have right to choose what they really w...
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Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ital. On this account, adverts are just an access to let you know the range of choice, bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, you know, first of all, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28481012658 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15943159144 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645569620253 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6350445408 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7777777778 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110985536917 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313158152481 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283644197474 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0735358979513 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116967253444 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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