Topic: Some people believe that smoking should be banned due to its effects, others argue that smoking has too many benefits to be banned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Smoking has inevitably been a concern to people around the world for many years. While it is often believed that smoking must not be allowed due to its various detrimental effects on people’s health, some people argue that it still has lots of positive aspects and should not be banned.
On the one hand, it is no doubt that smoking is harmful to humans’ health. Many scientists have claimed that smoking is the primary culprit of various dangerous diseases, especially lung cancer. For example, my grandfather has been a heavy smoker for over 20 years. He was diagnosed with lung cancer two years ago. Since then he has had to go to the hospital monthly, which costs him a lot of money. Chemotherapy makes him weaker as well as causes many pains to his body. Moreover, people around him are also forecasted to have some diseases related to cigarette smoke. Therefore, it is necessary for the government to prohibit smoking.
On the other hand, cigarettes also bring many financial benefits. Nowadays, cigarettes are popular with lots of people, so the cigarette industry is strongly developed in many countries, which contributes good revenues for the government through taxes. For instance, in China, the taxes on cigarettes are extremely high. If a person spends 10 RMB to buy a package of cigarettes then 7.5 RMB are added into the government’s turnover. Secondly, a lot of people enjoy smoking so there will be a huge number of people working for cigarette companies. If the government banned smoking, a huge number of citizens will definitely become unemployed, which is the financial burden of the whole society. Therefore, smoking should not be banned due to its economic merits.
In conclusion, although cigarettes consumption brings some benefits to the economy, I personally think that they should be prevented due to its negative effects on people’s health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...of money. Chemotherapy makes him weaker as well as causes many pains to his body. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13225806452 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87517089932 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561290322581 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8262153547 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3888888889 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283379707659 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882781939905 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107931426336 0.0667982634062 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202846706018 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981996276516 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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