Topic: Some people say that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people say that unpaid community service shouldn’t be a compulsory part of high school programs participating in volunteer group distracts students from studying. However, in my opinion, taking part in unpaid community service in high school curriculums (curricula) brings students a number of benefits for the two following reasons giving students opportunities for social life and promoting both physical and mental health.
First of all, there’s no doubt that participating in volunteering activities gives students opportunities for social life. To become a successful adult, they need, of course, gain essential skills, such as communication and solving skill. As you know, the more people we meet, the more things we can learn; therefore, how you can meet many people when you’re only at home and school. Luckily, volunteer allows you to connect to various of people ( teenagers, adults, elders,etc…). By experiences, you learn the way to talk with each kind of person, and I’m sure you will be surprised for the knowledge that you learn from them.Another vital skill is solving flair. Becoming a young adult is the most difficult time of life. You have trouble with work and relationships like friends, family and colleges. If you can’t handle it, you will lose. In addition, volunteering help you find your purpose of life: the person you want to be, the thing you want to do. For example, you spend time caring for children at orphanage, which make you realise you love them so much and encourage you to be a pediatrician. It’s so amazing.
More significantly, Being involved volunteering activities boosts your physical and mental health. The VOA article has shown that people who do good things tend to live not only longer but also healthier. They explain that while helping others, your body produce a chemical that advance the immune system to protect yourself from diseases like chronic pain and heart diseases. In addition, playing a role in unpaid community service promote mental health. You feel more self- confidence, responsible and mature since you’re doing meaning works for your own country. Beside, keeping contact with people help you develop a solid support system, which protect you against stress and depression when you’re facing hardened time.
Some opponents of taking part in volunteer may claim that participating this activities distract students from studying. While it might be true, the more momentous is teaching them how to manage time. This skill is the key to help you succeed in college, where you not only focus on subject but also have to take part in many activities. Furthermore, score is not only factor to achieve. All good positions in company require employees having experiences and foreign language. As the result, volunteer give you better career opportunities in future.
To sum up, unpaid community service is necessary in high school curriculum. First, taking part in volunteer provides students opportunities for social life. Moreover, volunteering activites promote physical and mental health. Lastly, I believe that people who receive a comprehensive education are the key to develop a wealthy country.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2726.0 1615.20841683 169% => OK
No of words: 505.0 315.596192385 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39801980198 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87257328654 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550495049505 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 506.74238477 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4281207421 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4137931034 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.96551724138 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 8.67935871743 242% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27173438173 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719297508648 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788410716475 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168329935622 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06772977439 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.