Violence in our society is increasing day by day nowadays and it is argued by some that media is the main promoter of violence. To a large extent I agree with this view, the reasons for which will be enumerated in this essay.
On the one hand, it is a fact that nowadays the media such as news and movies are packed full with negative information such as crimes and rapes. This will have a negative impact on the public because when they watch all these programs they will have a tendency to try out these negative things in their life. For example, a kid in America inspired by the 9/11 attack stole a truck a drove it straight into a supermarket only to kill himself.
However, on the other hand, we cannot fully blame the media for the violence occuring in the society, family also plays an important role in people's behaviour. It is from family where most individuals learn how to behave and live in a society. So If family fails in providing good guidance to individuals then there is chance that people will choose the path of violence. For instance, a study conducted by the Oxford University press in 2018 found out most of the people who become criminals had a bad family background. So we cannot fully blame media for the violence in our society.
In conclusion, although media are promoters of violence in our society, I believe family also play an important role in is person's behaviour.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 245, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rn how to behave and live in a society. So If family fails in providing good guidance...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59126984127 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48848127432 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551587301587 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5554637281 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.181818182 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175163097212 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697820566181 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790810555903 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124995303216 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802513121612 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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