When international media including (movies , fashion shows, advertisements and other TV programmes)
Convey the same messages to the global audience
People argue that the expansion of international media has has negative impacts or cultural diversity.
What is your opinion?
When media around the world with it’s different types as ( fashion shows , movies and talk shows ) exhibit the same ideas and messages to the people watching around the world they are unsatisfied with what’s the media all over the world is effecting negativity on the culture diversity
In my opinion Media is really effecting in an opposite way, that it doesn’t show the real image of how life is going and people get tricked by all of that fake stuff
First, this essay will discuss media problems with showing a wrongs image to the audience followed by the wrong beauty standard that media is pushing to like it
Media is called the soft power; (films , fashion shows and tv shows ) this things that we see on a small screen if it was the mobile or the tv or even our laptops can easily change our mind and our way of thinking. It can make people can see a wrong image of a whole region just because media show this to them as what is happening right now with Arabs that the western media introduce us to other countries as terrorists
Media is also presenting to us beautiful girls that have no acne ,stretch marks and scars and what they call the “perfect body “ but they don’t know that there is no one perfect
Then afterwards girls think that they are no that beautiful and try every single product in the market to reach the goal of those girls that are already fake.
As what we can see on these fashion shows “French body” and “perfect girls” with that glamorous makeup and hair with volume and length
After all of what the media is persuading us to believe we should keep our beliefs in case it is not toxic and harmful for us
At the end my opinion is that we should have more observation on media all around the world to prevent having wrong information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, then, after all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63190184049 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39027306789 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530674846626 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 16.0721442886 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 108.0 20.2975951904 532% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 179.337670332 49.4020404114 363% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 503.333333333 106.682146367 472% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 108.666666667 20.7667163134 523% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.3333333333 7.06120827912 302% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183455057625 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125610670657 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576565213878 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780492054447 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586069198234 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 54.7 13.0946893788 418% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.22 50.2224549098 -42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 43.0 11.3001002004 381% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.76 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.85 8.58950901804 138% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 9.78957915832 552% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 45.2 10.1190380762 447% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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