When the time comes to commence full-time employment individuals who have graduated from university deserve higher salary than those have notTo what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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When the time comes to commence full-time employment individuals who have graduated from university deserve higher salary than those have not
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

An often debated topic is whether the attended and graduated students should have financial advantages over those who did not. Personally, I mostly agree with this opinion for a number of reasons.

On the one hand, to gain the academic qualifications in universities, the students must invest their time as well as money for many years. They need to restlessly undertake the long periods, overcome numerous stressful exams and even abandon entertainments to acquire knowledge, skills required for future jobs. The students in biological and medical fields, for instance, experience 6 years in college and internship periods to be able work in hospitals. Therefore, higher payments is reasonable for their efforts.

Furthermore, highly educated people usually possess some well-trained skills that are necessary in workplace. For example, the analysis capabilities, stem from statistics class in university, can help the employee cope with data quickly, thus saving time and human resource for company.And interestingly , the more and more number of newly graduated students get acquainted with multi-languages , which may bring a huge potential for employers.Thus, these students should be paid better salary than less qualified peers.

However, not all of the tasks students learn from college can be applied to real workplaces. Just individuals are excellent in theriocal classes do not mean they will be obviously good workers. There are many cases in illustrations, those offer university graduates but can not adapt the demand of recruitment. To handle this phenomenon, the company ought to qualify recruits by not only their degrees but also practical experiences.

To sum up, while I totally agree with remuneration should mostly qualification-based, the performance is important as well. Therefore, given this situation, the company need to consider and judge their staff carefully.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66083916084 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17390551455 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.685314685315 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.6632270552 49.4020404114 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.642857143 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164750580761 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500144351953 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425512468055 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903974946972 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519985069894 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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