Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the primary determinant of achievement is luck. I totally disagree with this idea.
On the one hand, I strongly believe that being industrious and determined is more important than being lucky . On the way of reaching one’s goals, there are no tracks of laziness. The CEO of Facebook, Mark Zuckemberg is an example. His early start is a difficult route, but now his hard work makes Facebook a great success with more than one billion downloads in the world. Similarly, despite being born without any arms, Nguyen Ngoc Ky overcame his bad luck with all of his determination to write by his legs and became one of the novelist teachers in Viet Nam.
On the other hand, a fortune does not play a significant role in achieving objects. Firstly, one may be disappointed if they always wait for the magic things happening in their live. For example, being dependent on luck may boost the chance of failing an exam to students. Moreover, there is a clear evidence that luck will probably bring a person short-term attainment. Let’s take a case of lottery winners whose lucky destiny cannot hold them during their lives.
In short, relying on luck will be likely to sow the seeds of failure. I strongly believe that the more you work hard, the more you are on the way to the attainment of your goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, for example, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1099.0 1615.20841683 68% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73706896552 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58464613831 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637931034483 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7742700645 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103245511772 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395682670329 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364013805256 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.084000701509 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477451307554 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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