As the world becomes more technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs which people work at. As a result, some problems may be resulted from this situation.
Cashiers are less likely to be visible. As computers become more advanced, customers can use the computer in the supermarkets to pay instead of to be done by the cashier. Under an advanced technology, all forms of payment are able to pay on their own, inclusive of a self-paid banking services. Cashiers will be lost eventually.
Teachers, generally, are replaced by computers. As a matter of fact, as e-learning outcompetes teachers teaching at school, which resulted by the present phenomenon of technological advancement. Not only does the computer provides online learning to students, who are visual learners, prior to their learning, but also possesses an interactive learning mode. This will, in the end, replace the job position of teachers who will no longer exist. Teachers will be of less qualified as a job post.
Therefore problems may result from the situation of computer replacement. The absence of job positions not only leads to unemployment, but also a progression towards hinder in communication. Instead of face-to-face interactions, people are inclined to have lower chances to speak verbally with one another. In this way, it is foreseen that communication will no longer necessary in everyday life. Worse still, zero communication is more than possible to happen. Maintaining relation, intimacy, and a sense of association will, in the end, vanish and fade out.
In conclusion, it does seem likely that the advanced technology is dominating whether we like it or not. Now the issue has become- problems has arisen. I believe that sooner or later, the biggest problem is that human communication will no longer possible. Since technology is progressing, undeniably, we have to accept that more job positions will soon be lost.
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As the world becomes more
As the world becomes more technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs which people work at. As a result, some problems may be resulted from this situation.
Cashiers are less likely to be visible. As computers become more advanced, customers can use the computer in the supermarkets to pay instead of to be done by the cashier. Under an advanced technology, all forms of payment are able to pay on their own, inclusive of a self-paid banking services. Cashiers will be lost eventually.
Teachers, generally, are replaced by computers. As a matter of fact, as e-learning outcompetes teachers teaching at school, which resulted by the present phenomenon of technological advancement. Not only does the computer provides online learning to students, who are visual learners, prior to their learning, but also possesses an interactive learning mode. This will, in the end, replace the job position of teachers who will no longer exist. Teachers will be of less qualified as a job post.
Therefore problems may result from the situation of computer replacement. The absence of job positions not only leads to unemployment, but also a progression towards hinder in communication. Instead of face-to-face interactions, people are inclined to have lower chances to speak verbally with one another. In this way, it is foreseen that communication will no longer necessary in everyday life. Worse still, zero communication is more than possible to happen. Maintaining relation, intimacy, and a sense of association will, in the end, vanish and fade out.
In conclusion, it does seem likely that the advanced technology is dominating whether we like it or not. Now the issue has become- problems has arisen. I believe that sooner or later, the biggest problem is that human communication will no longer possible. Since technology is progressing, undeniably, we have to accept that more job positions will soon be lost.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 223, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provide'?
Suggestion: provide
...advancement. Not only does the computer provides online learning to students, who are vi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 234.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40170940171 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15505038043 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623931623932 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.21779978 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2666666667 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382438582409 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110982262805 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122655463347 0.0667982634062 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230513752488 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162939896691 0.056905535591 286% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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