Write a paragraph of about 150 words on the following topic. Some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.
Nowadays, many young peoples use a lot of their time smartphones day by day. In my point of view, this development will give us a lot of negative effects.
On the one hand, there are many reasons to interpret the adverse of it, chief amongst them is that young people will face up with health problems. For example, a really young student called Nam, who prevalent last year in Vietnam, because he have to use giant spectacles in order to solve his eye's problem which appeared as a result of using smartphones more than 4 hours a day. Another tangible reason is that using a smartphone too much will make you run out of time for other work. If young peoples spend too much time on these things, they will hard to acquire their goals and also the good result in their exams at school.
On the other hand, it is taken for granted that smartphones will bring some advantages to young people. Firstly, they can use it as an implement for their study. Although digital devices are present in almost countries of the world, there are a lot of people who can't afford to buy a computer so the smartphone is a good modification. Secondly, young can learn a wide range of information from the Internet. For example, instead of going to the library, people can save time by using their smartphones to search for and read the book that they need.
In conclusion, although smartphones can bring some positive effects, I think that the negative effect of using them too much is a big problem so the government and residents, especially the parents need to pay more attention to this development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 196, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a prevalent'.
Suggestion: who is a prevalent
...ple, a really young student called Nam, who prevalent last year in Vietnam, because he have t...
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Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...valent last year in Vietnam, because he have to use giant spectacles in order to sol...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...he world, there are a lot of people who cant afford to buy a computer so the smartph...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62190812721 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52686004033 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558303886926 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7926559095 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144584210773 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564617374411 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397487306023 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102831519288 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302777829083 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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