Writing task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Nowadays sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways Is this a positive or

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Writing task 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.
Nowadays, sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways. Is this a positive or negative development for sports?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 254 words.

Accompanied by the development of a larges number of bussiness, sports have also become a bussiness that people recently care about. Although it brings high financial benefits, it still has a lot of downsides.
In one hand, the growth of sports brings a wide amount benefits not only to the countries but also the players. First, the more people care about sports, the more athletes and coaches are, so it also means there are a lot of job chances and choices to people who love sports. Second, watching sports is one of the most general types of relaxing. With the fully supply of equipment such as TV, Internet..., people nowadays can easily watch a beautiful performance of their favourite athletes. Besides, sports development is an excellent changes to improve the friendship between nations. Also, it is clear that, the development of sports also is the good promotion compare with others bussinesses.
In another hand, it has a lot of potiential dangers. The expansion of sports is a good opportunity to bad organizations which gamble at cards. It may affect to the fairness of the matches. In some worst conditions, they can threaten the athletes or maybe kill them. Besides, because of high earnings after matches, some sportmans use stimulants to excite their muscles which is banded.
Everything has two sides, and sports development is not an exception. Therefore, the government should care about their evolution to intervene at the right time in case the worst happens. It is noticable that the evolution of sports has a lot benefits but it still has drawsides.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 537, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'change'?
Suggestion: change
...des, sports development is an excellent changes to improve the friendship between natio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00380228137 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78842320419 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566539923954 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.011167485 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.25 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4375 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173938466761 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517091261412 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300116297338 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104957068737 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360173683273 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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