You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives.
In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, many people’s expectancies are longer as well as their health is now much better than elder people in the past. This essay will demonstrate the advantages that society may gain when human can live longer.
The first benefit lies in industrial factors. When people can work longer with the same energy, the labor quantity and productivity thrive. As a result, this phenomenon can boost whole national economy. And people lives will be improved significantly. For example, many Vietnamese families have gained more benefits since the government decided to increase the retirement age as old people can continue working for a few more years. One more thing, when people can work longer in their life, they can have more time to teach new employees how to work properly. This can reduce much cost for training as workers can learn from their seniors
Another bright side is that they will have more time and energy to play with their grandchildren. This is very important as many national reports in the last 20 years mentioned that children were lack of memories with their grandparents. So when people can live longer, they can address this problem. Furthermore, creating amazing memories and great bonds between grandparents and children is a precious action. Strengthening connections also makes society a happier place to live. Without it, we can feel isolated from older people and our childhood may be unfulfilled. According to my provincial recent research, 40% of my province’s products are currently created by residents who are 65 or above.
In conclusion, elder people with sustained health and energy can bring back a great deal of benefits. Given this, government should invest more money in healthcare service, especially for people over 65.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: than
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... as workers can learn from their seniors Another bright side is that they will ha...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ucts are currently created by residents who are 65 or above. In conclusion, elder peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1958041958 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71485428008 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2360437357 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4117647059 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8235294118 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289610011809 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10111582626 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695957613203 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189052748999 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274842461203 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.