Young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. Why? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?
It is cleared that leaving the countryside to major cities has become prevalent among young people due to the availability of better universities and future career aspects. While some people argue that the disadvantages of this phenomenon pale in comparison with its merits, I would agree with this school of thought.
There are two main benefits which prompt a growing number of young from the rural areas to cities. Firstly, there are many prestigious universities which are located in the heart of urban cities. It means that these schools would attract ambitious students who pursue further education. Higher degree, such as Master of Business Administration (MBA), for example, might ensure graduates well-paid professions.
Secondly, in terms of business, despite the fierce competition in the global market, youngsters believe that it is a dynamic environment. Thanks to the varied labor dispersion, people can have professional jobs compared to the remote areas where the economy is limited. Furthermore, in big cities, seniors could be offered better compensation and benefit packages after retirement. In light of the aforementioned benefits, elite intellectuals have become aware of the availability of opportunities for academic performance and career advancement.
However, some potential drawbacks of this trend should be taken into consideration. Even though the entire human resource of a country may be better utilized, the beneficiary is only the large cities. While the economy of cities continues progressing, the gap between rural areas and urban cities could be further widened. It means that losing young and competent labor force, rural villages and towns will encounter a series of workforce pressures in fields like farming.
In conclusion, I believe that the demerits will not overshadow its benefits. Moreover, the growth in this trend is mainly attributed to the greater chances, as well as the improved living standard.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53511705686 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97298267169 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622073578595 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.1868534406 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.4375 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181401270921 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483054374347 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531474083424 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923000623765 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617288392032 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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