The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view

The three given charts present what secondary school students in Australia do after they graduate over a twenty-year period starting in 1980.
Overall, there are three options for Australian graduates which consist of unemployment, employment and further education. Additionally, graduates gradually tended to choose to become employees rather than go to further education.
At the first glance at the charts, in 1980, it is obvious that haft of the total number of Australian students took further education after graduating from secondary school. In 1990, the figure decreased to 38% and in 2000, it was 37%. In other words, further education in Australia seemed to be less necessary to a part of secondary graduates.
By contrast, in 1980, 40 per cent of the total graduates engaged in employment. In 1990, the rate rose to 50% and continued increasing to 55% in 2000. Accordingly, Australian graduates were prone to working and earning money rather than getting a higher qualification. Besides, the unemployed proportion in 1980 was 10%, this rate slightly increased to 12% in 1990 and declined to 8% in 2000. These statistics somewhat reflect that unemployment is not a warning problem for Australian graduates for the past 20 years

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Average: 1.1 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, first, if, second, so, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1043.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 198.0 315.596192385 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26767676768 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96259802237 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626262626263 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7751106906 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0231660672026 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00860759435933 0.084324248473 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0183310435235 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0161557771552 0.151304729494 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018003325622 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, first, if, second, so, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1043.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 198.0 315.596192385 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26767676768 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96259802237 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626262626263 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7751106906 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0231660672026 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00860759435933 0.084324248473 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0183310435235 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0161557771552 0.151304729494 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018003325622 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.