The youth in many countries are unemployed and unskilled, while at the same time, the military services are in need of people. Compulsory military service is beneficial and necessary.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
everybody knows that military services are obligation in some countries while it is not in some countries. This situation is saw as a problem by people about their countries which have obligatory military service. Obviously, some people who unemployment and unskilled are saw suit to be soldier for military needs, but maybe those people do not want to be soldier. And also, obligatory military service is obstruction for talented people who study university and have a career their job, because military service obligation disrupt their career. Because of these reasons, military services should not be obligation, it should be volunteer service.
To start with, even if some people are unemployed and unskilled, they should be not encourage to attend to army by government, because government is responsible about their unemployed status. And also, government should creative new chance to their life about job and education. If people want to participate to army with their own decisions even though government’s opportunities and possibilities, government can support their decision.
In addition to status of unemployed and unskilled people, government should make regulation about people’ who have good educated and career, compulsory military service.These people have already have decided about their job and lifestyle, so obligatory military service can interrupt their studies and projects. As a result, countries can not benefit these people’ value added.
Finally, military service is venerable and it is about love and dependence of country. Therefore, government can not enforce about military service. If should be volunteer service and it should become professional. Hopefully, this situation will be noticed by government and necessary regulates will be made.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Everybody
everybody knows that military services are obliga...
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Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sawed', 'sawn', 'seen'.
Suggestion: sawed; sawn; seen
...ot in some countries. This situation is saw as a problem by people about their coun...
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Line 2, column 96, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'attending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: attending
...unskilled, they should be not encourage to attend to army by government, because governme...
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Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
...and career, compulsory military service.These people have already have decided about ...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...itary service.These people have already have decided about their job and lifestyle, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71641791045 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04123248207 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488805970149 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.573459503 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.428571429 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193931652877 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843317516238 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052935612266 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127765614803 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057790532111 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.