Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of all societies. Do you think art and music still have a place in today's modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?
Creativity and entertainment are two crucial aspects of human life. Although they play a vital role in people's life irrespective of their age, children should not be forced to learn art and music in early childhood.
With the advent of technology, the modes of entertainment have changed in the past few years, but not the music. Furthermore, people always listen to the songs from a different genre while travelling, commuting to the workplace or doing daily household activities because musical themes, vibes and backgrounds boost up the mood and energy of an individual. For instance, a report published in the Hindustan Times in 2018, demonstrated that the musical applications such as Gaana, Wink and Sawan have extreme popularity among the young generation, if compared to other modern applications available in Google play store.
However, elders should not make it mandatory for children to acquire knowledge of music at school. Music is only one way of enjoyment, if any child has immense interest in learning it, he/she should not be stopped, but teachers should not burden every student with extra responsibilities of subjects as listening to the music does not require any particular skillset. Moreover, children can be taught music even in the adult age or later years of life as learning does not have any boundaries. For example, a famous Indian classical singer Sameer, started learning music at the age of 25, which did not have any negative impact on his career, instead, he is leading a happy and prosperous life.
In conclusion, in spite of many technological advancements, music has some benefits for the human mind so it cannot be ignored. But nobody should be burdened to gain skills of music in childhood as anyone can enjoy it even without knowing the fundamental aspects of the music.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h the advent of technology, the modes of entertainment have changed in the past f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11409395973 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86769657005 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620805369128 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8888370134 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.545454545 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0909090909 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314554663021 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116574476837 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536039128506 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175604864747 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279669146267 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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