Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas To what extent do you agree or disagree

Art is a powerful form of communication and has become an indispensable part of human civilization. Many believe that in order to develop creativity of artists, an unlimited amount of freedom is a need and artists should be allowed to convey any concepts completely freely. Whereas, others say that artists’ freedom should be restricted. In my opinion, I tend to support the idea freedom of expression should be censored by government to protect people and society.
Artists’ expression of art should be limited to protect young people from criminal activities. For instance, without necessary regulation, minors can approach pornography easily through film or picture. It might stimulate them engage in sexual activities leading to illegal behavior. The epitome of this point would be the increase in abortion rate of teenager recently. In addition, it is dangerous if the young are not protected from violent. The best possible example of it is the increase in the number of under eighteen crime is related to the violent content in their familiar activities such as video games, comics or movies since they are tent to learn and mimic violence from these resources.
Another point the restriction should be applied on artists’ concepts is to prevent political conflicts in society. Obviously, topics relating to religion usually create arguments since each religion has different perspective. In some cases, it might end up by murder and violence. In addition, some bad group of people might take advantage from art to against government by spreading incorrect information about government in movie, music or pictures. Consequently, it would lead to unrest in society.
In conclusion, thus art plays a crucial role in society and government should encourage artists to develop their creativity, limiting the thoughts and ideas should be necessarily applied to not only protect the young from unwanted content but also keep the society in stability.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, thus, whereas, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35922330097 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90629662089 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592233009709 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9444173409 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233916415219 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698116803678 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852859291437 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14457488539 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937020848121 0.056905535591 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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