Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art is an externalisation of skills of an artist. Some people are with an opinion that artists should be given liberty at full scale to express their opinion by art, however, there are some
People who oppose this opinion.

First of all, the people who support artists with full liberty are with an opinion that, if artists are given full freedom to express their views, they would be able to Unveil the social issues in a society without any fear. They pick up a cancerous spot and request the society to uproot that. Secondly, the artists are like nerve of a nation with extraordinary skills, their creativity can create certain kind of impact on every country in the map.

However, there are some people who do not agree with the notion that “artist should be given full freedom” because they feel that some of the artists can deter the cultural opinions of the people. For example, an artist in a fil showed a Hindu god in a embarrassing way which hurt the emotions of many Hindu people which eventually led to demise of some people.

To conclude, artists should be given full freedom te express their views, but with regular supervision by the government.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o express their opinion by art, however, there are some People who oppose this o...
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Line 6, column 141, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ll freedom' because they feel that some of the artists can deter the cultural opinions...
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Line 6, column 259, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a embarrassing way" with adverb for "embarrassing"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., an artist in a fil showed a Hindu god in a embarrassing way which hurt the emotions of many Hindu p...
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Line 6, column 262, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n artist in a fil showed a Hindu god in a embarrassing way which hurt the emotion...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 977.0 1615.20841683 60% => OK
No of words: 204.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78921568627 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49811058937 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 176.041082164 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539215686275 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 506.74238477 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8520472844 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.125 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.125 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278199629145 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130562641945 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077026527593 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162736760513 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620434495942 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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