Today, children tend to watch television, rather than do sport. Lack of playgrounds and sport facilities, parent's attention have influenced in thier tendency toward television. These problems lead to negative consequences, but I will give suggestions to encourage them to do outdoor activities.
Nowadays, residential neighborhood changes have led to young part of society to face with lack of playgrounds. There are a lot of high rise buildings, where teenagers could not find place to play group games such as football or basketball. Children desire toward to stay at home and enjoy from watching television was enhanced. Nevertheless, good television quality attracted them in itself. Children become tend to have problem with eyes and overweighting. I think, Authority or home builders should build playgrounds for youths in order to make them to do outdoor activities and keep fit themselves.
Dual-working lifestyle is the main reason of children's loneliness. Neither father nor mother could not pay attention to their children due to their job. Their children had stayed at home, also, did what they want. Children become separated from community. Loneliness leads to children have problem with friendship. In my opinion friends can be motivate each other in order to enjoy doing sport. Also Parents should separate time for their children. Nevertheless they should interest their children to take part in sports and to make decision. Parents' have great experience in order to their childhood.
To sum up, I think juveniles should attraced in outdoor activities. It helps them to make friendship, keep fit themselves. Either government or communitoes must take responsibility in themselves and build sport facilities or playgrounds in good condition for usage.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ch other in order to enjoy doing sport. Also Parents should separate time for their ...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...hould separate time for their children. Nevertheless they should interest their children to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nevertheless, so, i think, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46350364964 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01672085559 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620437956204 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0166242677 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.2857142857 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0476190476 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173041245359 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540037871872 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043871717321 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912790858258 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637422369691 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.5 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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