Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Welfare can have a great impact on the quality of people's lives and money plays an important role in individuals' prosperity and success. While a group of people believe that children who are born in less affluent families have better nurture and they have the ability to cope with the future problems, I would argue that I do agree with this issue to a certain extent but I also believe that poverty and lack of money can impose the adverse effect on children's life.
There are a variety of reasons why I would argue that children who are brought up in poorer families raise better to deal with difficulties. Firstly, these children usually learn to work hard and persevere to access their aims and they are determined to success. Secondly, parents cannot provide everything that they need and they learn to be satisfied with their life and their possessions. Finally, these fellows take their parents as their role models and will learn to deal with problems and overcome their difficulties.
On the other hand, lack of money and poverty may lead to some severe problems in the future such as juvenile delinquency, violence and savagery. Furthermore, it will cause lack of self esteem and confidence in children since they compare themselves with their friends and they will be under peer pressure. A salient example of this is Germany who indicates in a research that a majority of wealthy children are more confident than other children.Besides, families who are rich can spend more time with their children and they are more involved with their childrens' upbringing; consequently, they are more aware of children's behaviour.
In conclusion, the great impact of money in life should not be neglected since it brings comfort and tranquility into our lives. Although children of rich families could access better resources for education and recreational activities, the children of poorer families learn to work hard to achieve their goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05900621118 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67542753656 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506211180124 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0320457751 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.090909091 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2727272727 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7272727273 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326371391623 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118616699909 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996481328715 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191151786725 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466449418146 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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