It is better for students at university to live far away from home that to live at home with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is a well known saying that , “ Prevention is better than cure.” The increasing health hazards especially due to the contaminated food and water in the university hostels is forcing parents to think- if home is the better option for residing rather than moving to the hostel. According to me staying at home is much better as it provides a good environment and friends when compared to hostels.
Obviously, good health must be the priority between any of the two choices. Daily we come across the news stating about the increasing number of death ratio amongst the university students staying in hostels. A recent survey done by the renowned institute ‘Post graduate institute of medical research’ was published in “The hinustan times” newspaper on 25th March 2018. It stated that twenty five percent of the medical students showed deteriorating health in the last two years of their hostel life. It was possibly because of their poor hygeine. They became more obese and weak when compared to the day scholars
Moreover, staying at home provides an opportunity to deepen the parent-child relationship. It has been observed that the gap between the parents and their wards is increasing these days. There are lot of reasons amongst which the widening distance between the family members can't be ignored. Daily coming back to home after college increases the bond of attachment between the family members, consequently focussing the concept of joint family. This can ultimately lead to happy and positive environment in ones home.
Moreover, parents are the only ones, with whom we can discuss our each and every problem. They act as building blocks in our career by sacrificing their own lifes.They can act as our friends with no benefits. Comparing it with the hostels where ragging and bullying is done by the seniors, one must choose to live in the student friendly atmosphere which is more obvious under parents observation.
In gist, i would like to conclude that living within the family is a much better choice rather than the university hostles. It has lot of advantages like- better atmosphere and health, which are hard to find and enjoy in the hostel life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, moreover, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09944751381 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69055337737 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569060773481 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9122609386 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.588235294 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.11764705882 7.06120827912 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197653114481 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566328808631 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396521671763 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102177559057 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344883895185 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.