It is sometimes suggested that primary schoolchildren should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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It is sometimes suggested that primary schoolchildren should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals.

Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Submitted by nirav9971 on Sat, 10/17/2020 - 23:44

It is advised by a vast section of the society that the pupils at the primary school learn about farming and keeping animals.
Although, it has certain manageable disadvantages, in my discourse ahead, this essay will enunciate on the ideas in favor of my
belief that the merits of this suggestion has more impactful merits than minor demerits.

To begin with, learning a practical skill of growing vegetables and keeping animals has some significant advantages. First and foremost merit is that
the pupils develop the basic understanding of farming from primary level only. If they have interest in it, this would provide them numerous career
opportunities in the evergreen agriculture industry in the later part of life. Moreover, keeping animals not only inculcates morals and values of life such as caring and honesty but also helps to understand the significant importance of animals as a part of ecosystem and the society. For an example, as per report in the New York Times in July,2019, the school-going children learn a lot about honesty by keeping pet animals such as cats and dogs.

Despite the advantages highlighted above, there are certain disadvantages of learning about growing vegetables and keeping animals which should not
be ignored. If children learn this in their primary school, it may be possibility that they would not get enough time to concentrate in their academic subjects. This may deviate students from basic education which would hamper their academic growth. However, this can be easily managed by proper time management. For an instance, in the the United Kingdom, all pupils learn about plantation as a part of their curriculum without affecting their theoretical subjects.

In conclusion, there undeniably are some demerits of learning about growing plants and keeping animals as outlined above, I strongly believe that
this advice has more and impactful positives about inculcating morals and other skills which certainly have positive impact in later part of life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.325 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76529129343 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540625 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8813313661 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.076923077 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252937962801 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943520154211 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783788258221 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113993697801 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884219602958 0.056905535591 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll enunciate on the ideas in favor of my belief that the merits of this suggestio...
^^^
Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntages. First and foremost merit is that the pupils develop the basic understandi...
^^^
Line 6, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... this would provide them numerous career opportunities in the evergreen agricultu...
^^^
Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'July 2019'.
Suggestion: July 2019
... as per report in the New York Times in July,2019, the school-going children learn a lot ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...les and keeping animals which should not be ignored. If children learn this in th...
^^^
Line 10, column 334, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...er time management. For an instance, in the the United Kingdom, all pupils learn about ...
^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 334, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...er time management. For an instance, in the the United Kingdom, all pupils learn about ...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...undeniably are some demerits of learning about growing plants and keeping animals...
^^
Line 12, column 147, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... outlined above, I strongly believe that this advice has more and impactful posit...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.325 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76529129343 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540625 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8813313661 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.076923077 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252937962801 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943520154211 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783788258221 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113993697801 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884219602958 0.056905535591 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.