Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their children s study On the contrary those online games have produced a lot of negative effects on their mental and physical development What is your opinion

It’s no news that computer games are one of the trending activities practice today. The purpose of the game is for recreation but recently reports has shown how addicting this activities are. Researched made reported that the psychological dependency on this games are creating a bane on the mental and psychical development of children.

However the the addiction caused by this activities makes children psychologically dependent on it . He/she would develop an addiction to playing this games and creating lesser time for academics and physical activities, such addiction will cause a stray from their academic performance in school and a daunting social interaction with people . To illustrate, a certain parents reported their 9 years old son to the government authority because he couldn’t be contained any more . Further investigations were made that the boy was anti social and an addict to video games , at an earlier age he was diagnosed with a mental illness and was referred to a therapeutic center .

Moreover , Most computer games indulge in violent actions and character , knowing how quickly children Mimic their favorite roles. This negative traits developed could make children expose to vulgarity and if intended might lead to a mental illness . For instance , True-Die, a popular video game that causes hysteria in parents because the motive of the final lap was a suicidal mission , imagine what damage this might have caused in the psychological and physical development in children.

In conclusion , video games have increasingly affected the development of children . It’s havoc is of great effect and I suggest that parents should encourage physical activities to their children .

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44528301887 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96681480086 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592452830189 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6442462826 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.25 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297867558412 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119279158861 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060213639381 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212009685626 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753782202342 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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