Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?
It is believed by many that social sites have had adverse ramifications on a person as well as on the community. I totally agree with this assertion.
Undoubtedly, social platform has its benefits. Most important of them all is that it provides connectivity to people, especially those who stay at a longer distance. For instance, most of my friends are living in a foreign country. I often use social platforms such as Skype or Facebook to chat and see them at the with a touch of a button. On the other hand, This type of interaction was never possible before the social sites.
Nevertheless, the negative impacts social sites have brought far outweigh the benefits. For example, individual who uses a social site more makes his life more sedentary. By using these sites every day, one would gets addicted to their alluring functions and spend most of the time sitting ideal. Before the invention of such sites, I used to spend my leisure time playing outdoor games, but now I mostly stay online on social platforms. This means that I do not exercise and my life has become inactive.
Furthermore, social sites have also increased the crime rates in the society. Most people upload their photos, on these sites, that can be which are being misused. One of my female friends has found that someone had stolen her identity and created her fake account on Facebook just to blackmail her for some money. Police were unable to catch the person because he had malfunctioned modified the IP address of a computer. Therefore, it can be said that social sites have also given birth to the social crimes.
In conclusion, social networking platforms are putting substantial negative influences on both an individual and the society. Usage of these platforms would not only make someone lazy, but it also increases the social misdeeds.
Full marks for structure. Very well articulated with intro para, first body para taking side of social media, and next two body paras in favour of it's negative impact, and then conclusion. Another big plus is use of examples and personal example. Use of linking words before each paragraph is great as well.
Plus, your use of vocab is very high as well which will benefit you, except one word 'malfunctioned' that is used wrongly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
... using these sites every day, one would gets addicted to their alluring functions an...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 386.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86787564767 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57330577301 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575129533679 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7418805462 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2916666667 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258908749759 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667752110346 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068789521747 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119078574984 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687952154128 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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