Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

Submitted by andrew123 on Fri, 08/30/2019 - 07:16

Many argue that if they have a clear mind of what they will do in an early stage, and try hard with it, they will obtain a better career life. I completely agree that those who stick to their initial decision can achieve a more satisfying working life.
The fact is that many people have no idea what to do before graduation until working for years, when they have changed career paths several times. In this case, most experience in the former position can not be used in the next job, namely being wasted. For instance, nearly 30 percent of the candidates i interviewed have altered their jobs in different industries during the first 10 years after graduation, which is obviously not helpful.
On the other hand, those who choose on their career expectation early in lives start to enter an industry, to accumulate resources and to build interpersonal connections, and that will lead to an easier and more successful working life. A good example of this is one of my friend, who decided to work on building material and started his first job in an international company on that. After 5-6 years, he has been familiar with most functions and stakeholders in this industry and become an expert.
Besides the early decision, there are other aspects contributing to a more satisfying working life, such as one's interest, education background and so on. In conclusion, i am convinced that the people who set his/ her direction career and insist on it will achieve a better professional life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8093385214 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65619426706 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610894941634 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.3792723311 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.6 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417995695858 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143763138314 0.084324248473 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829414578426 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236729976926 0.151304729494 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748742170551 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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