Mobile phones and the internet could have many benefits for old people. However, this age group uses technology at least. What are the benefits for the old people of using mobile phones and the internet? How can we encourage them to use this technology?
In this contemporary era, after the dawn of science and technology, over 90% of the total population has been started using smartphones as well as the internet. Especially, elder people have been more beneficial by using it in their solitary life, however, the number has escalated for the senior citizens. The main advantages are it keeps connected with loved once, and be in contact through social media. Moreover, education and news could play an indispensable role in encouragement. I shall discuss the cons and ways to attract them in the coming paragraphs.
Firstly, mobile phones have made our life easy and gave us more comfort than ever. It has contributed a lot to keep in contact with our loved ones no matter where they are living. Elder youth could easily stay in touch with their kids as well as their grandkids too. However, the internet on the phone could make it easier for them by doing a video call. They feel extremely delightful while watching their kid's faces. Facetime, for the instance, an application on the iPhone that works with the internet and can help older people to do a video call with their family.
Secondly, to learn new technology might be difficult for them at the beginning, but with proper education and support from young youth, it could be fruitful for them. The government should arrange an awareness program about use of the smartphones and the internet on the computer and on phone only for that perticular age group. However, elder generation could educate themseves by watching videos and reading books related to the use of the internet and smartphones. As a consequences, they would not feel lonely and also keep themselves up-to-date with current development and inovation in different countries and sectors.
To put it in a nutshell, the technology has played a significant role in everyone's life no matter how older are they. The use of phone and the internet by older people would give them new spirit to live life after their retirement and away from their loved one. The number of users are low but with encouragement and the government support it could be increased dramatically.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 472, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consequence' or simply 'consequences'?
Suggestion: a consequence; consequences
...use of the internet and smartphones. As a consequences, they would not feel lonely and also ke...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95290858726 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70220151321 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537396121884 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8448256344 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289119719163 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823024212548 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070446898401 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178239835656 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341307861702 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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