In this contemporary era, music plays a paramount role in every culture and society. There is a conundrum among people whether music merely effect beneficial on persons and societies or has adverse impact. I will shed light on both opinions of the aforementioned statement and will further delineate it with plausible reasons followed by reasonable opinion.
Commencing with those who claim music brings only benefits. A predominant reason is that it is a good source of earning. To explicate it, nowadays the majority of individuals choose music as a profession and become singer. Due to which they also fulfilled their family needs as well as earn handsome money and societies also get profit from it. As societies obtain great music to relax their mood. To epitome, in today's time 70% of the youngsters choose music as a career because they want a fame in their life. As a result, there are numerous singers who donate their tiny amount of money to charity and for the welfare of the society.
As far as I am concerned with I advocate in the favor of latter statement. The reason behind is there are a number of youngsters who follow their favorite singers. Due to which they also start singing by which they lost a huge amount of money on music to become as a career. To exemplify, it had written in the newspaper that 60% of money was wasted by children in music industry. Therefore, youth only choose their career in which they a full knowledge and interest.
To recapitulate, I believe that music has influenced more on the societies as well as adolescents but there are some negative effects which people can not ignored.
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...e negative effects which people can not ignored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81205673759 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65779846138 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8407578336 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8125 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257307475398 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845833343201 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773515326843 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173889128729 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685518128998 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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