Nowadays, people move from one country to the other for finding jobs. Some people think children of these families suffer because of this, while others think it is helpful for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Globalization has enriched some of the developing countries with ample oppertunities. This in turn motivates few people to seek for a job in those countries and eventually immigrate. This behaviour is believed to have detrimental effects on their kids by some people, while other see that this is benificial to them. In my view, the challenges introduced to children by immigration is only a movementary and lasts until they get adjusted to their new country. In addition, it enabled their children to learn new culture, language and presents them a chance to pursue new opportunities.
Moving to a new country can be a very tough process for the children compared to their parents. This is because they tend to spend most of their time socialising with other kids of their age and upon relocation they completely lose their social network. .In addition to this, the local languages hinders their ability to communicate with other's. Which confines them to interact with only a few people in their day to day activities. Which in turn makes them isolated and tend to spend their time indoor.As a result, this makes them feel lonely and they try to be more silent. In a research, it is found out that, 35% of the immigrated children feel soltitude and 7% of them suffer with depression.
On the other hand, its viewed that the re-location process can be helpful to the children by a few people and i too agree with this. When they have moved to a new place, they get an opportunity to explore new areas interests. For instance in south asian countries like India, where more emphasis is on science and technology. When they move to Canada, they get an opportunity to learn or consider pursuing subjects like arts or theoritical physics as their career. This is helping them in having a wider picture of a career. lastly upon immigration it can be seen that children are the first to learn local culture and language. This is due to their quick grasping power. Upon mastering one international language, they will develop a quick skill to learn and master other languages as well
To conclude, it can be hard for the children to overcome the hurdles induced by the re-location. However, these effect them only for a short term and the benifits they get out weigh the hurdles. So i do agree that, immigration empowers the immigrants children and helps them to succeed better in life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 411.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81508515815 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72069297152 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501216545012 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3861252867 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2380952381 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232400199836 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767835283312 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481848947888 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157819194367 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026560675262 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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