One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantage of this development outweighs the disadvantages?
Healthcare is a fundamental need of the citizens of a country as this sector is related to their physiological and psychological well-being. Every year government spends a proportion of its budget on medical care and research. The purpose of doing this is to conduct empirical research on the vaccines and medication that can wipe out as many diseases as possible. With the advancement of medical care, people now live longer and there are many advantages brought by the improvement in medical care and increased life expectancy. In my opinion, these advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
By improving the medical care, a country will have fewer death cases caused by fatal diseases. With the advancement in technology, there are vaccines for many fatal diseases. The invention of the vaccine is all devoted to the government for spending some of the public money on medical care. The longer life expectancy gives us the opportunity to serve our country for a longer period and this will let us enjoy our life here on Earth. longer life is a symbol of the development of a country. many professionals like teachers, politician, researchers, mathematicians, writers and so on can contribute more to their matured and older ages.The longer life expectancy will let the grandparents spend more time their grandsons and granddaughters and that will let them teach values and traditions. The new generation would also learn past history which is important in shaping future of a country.
On the contrary, there will be a scarcity of resources if life expectancy keeps on increasing. Nowadays, many countries face poverty and starvation as the food production is not enough to feed all the people around the globe. When people live longer, that means there will be more people refuse to retire at an early age. this will lead to unemployment for the young generation. many fresh graduates will not be able to get a job only because experienced old people will hold those positions. Finally government and family will have to support the old people and that would require a huge amount of money.
in conclusion, longer life expectancy far outweighs the disadvantages. life is precious and the government should spend more money on medical care in any way possible. some of us might disagree that longer life is not beneficial but all of us want to live longer and contribute to our family and country for as long as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, well, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03225806452 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93308225425 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488833746898 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0929746178 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5714285714 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319077832919 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996311879331 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798327405038 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206482706092 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641721499475 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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