People doing dangerous sports like bungee jumping and scuba diving should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their live people.Do you agree or disagree?

It is no doubt that sport is supported to enhance our health, however, several certain sports like scuba diving and bungee jumping are indeed risky to participate as well as relevant works to save people. I completely agree that citizens should have the responsibility about their life and aid officer should guarantee the safety of participants.

Those sports have several dangers, predominately accident rates. Serious injuries such as bone fractures and head trauma are not uncommon in the extreme sports, even fatal accidents. It is too much money to participate in those activities merely for excitements. Most insurance schemes like tourism insurance do not cover those vigorous sports because of a high medical expenditures on the injuries. As a result, people should understand that those extreme activities are actually perilous and pay a lot. Consequently, individuals do take care of their own lives rather than playing a venture game.

On the other hand, the living survival plays a key role in each person, which rescue officers should have many professional skills to assist emergency cases. Actually, the more experience you have, the fewer mistakes you will rescue. It is compelling that people participating in the dangerous sports are responsible for warranty equipment preparation, especially, aid workers.

In conclusion, citizens should understand the hazardous disadvantage in playing the venture sports such as the activities of swimming or jumping. More importantly, both participants and rescue officers exactly know the optimal method to protect themselves and others. In my opinion, people should not do those kinds of sports unless there has any practical experience.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54022988506 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94079710383 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64367816092 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5298312538 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.285714286 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6428571429 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359079505273 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988921061101 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680917771705 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198659887851 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586483423189 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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