People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In a modern society, as a consequence of globalization, an increasing number of people have tendency to travel overseas or emigrate to a new country. However, it is argued that foreigners ought to adapt to the local traditions and customs. The following paragraphs are going to discuss this view and my own perception.
It is reasonable to believe that every foreigner is supposed to respect the culture of local residents. In the first place, following native traditions and customs plays an important role in bridging the cultural gap between newcomers and local people as well as promoting newcomers’ understanding of the code of conduct of that nation, so travellers or immigrants may find it easy to integrate themselves into this new community. In addition, immigrants will be confronted with a variety of problems such as being treated unfairly or excluded by the nation’s citizens if they cannot conform to a new country’s social norms and this could severely intensify the conflict between foreigners and indigenous residents as well.
On the other hand, it is also worth mentioning that newcomers should not always follow other people’s traditions. Firstly, most foreigners have their own traditions and cultures. Blindly following other customs or behaviour could shake a person’s faith on their own long-standing religions, which may become the culprit of the loss of cultural diversity. Furthermore, the host country should also accept cultural differences to emphasise social equity and justice rather than expect those tourists or immigrants to completely assimilate into an alien culture, since it contributes to social cohesion and stability. Australia, for instance, as a melting pot of cultures, shows great esteem for immigrants from diverse cultural backgrounds and most people have a comfortable social life in this country.
To sum up with my opinion, I agree with this view in some way since immigrants ought to comply with the rules of the host country. However, we cannot lose faith and belief on our own religions when following other customs and traditions.
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Essay evaluation report
have tendency to travel overseas
have a/the tendency to travel overseas
I agree with this view in some way since immigrants ought to comply with the rules of the host country.
I agree with this view in some ways immigrants ought to comply with the rules of the host country.
flaws:
Some sentences are too long. for example:
In addition, immigrants will be confronted with a variety of problems such as being treated unfairly or excluded by the nation’s citizens if they cannot conform to a new country’s social norms and this could severely intensify the conflict between foreigners and indigenous residents as well.
when sentences are long, be sensitive to use pronouns. 'they' refers to 'immigrants' or 'citizens'? 'this' refers to what which is not clear.
revised:
In addition, immigrants who cannot conform to a new country’s social norms will confront a variety of problems such as being treated unfairly or excluded by the nation’s citizens, which could severely intensify the conflict between foreigners and indigenous residents as well.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1722 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.202 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.84 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.432 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, to sum up, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40483383686 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08442791565 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567975830816 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.2954391159 49.4020404114 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.615384615 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187875992706 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654520770319 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451183434482 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116211702603 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212484911347 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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