Some industrialized countries have serious environmental problems. The damage to the environment is an inevitable result when a country tends to improve the standard of living. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that the environment of some developed countries has challenged. Although it is argued that this is an unavoidable consequence for a better living, I do not believe that environment should be damaged for the developments.
Industrial waste is the major pollutant for the air and water pollution. Due to industrial processing, lot of waste produce from factories which are throw away to rivers and open spaces. Beside this, the emitted gas during manufacturing work has contaminants such as Carbon, zinc, manganese which pollute the atmosphere. I believe the governments should not allow them polluting environment this way just for developments which will contaminate the air and water. They can introduce regulation for industries to proper waste recycling and gases filtering process to protect the environment.
Another point is that we have an option to replace the fossil fuel energy with renewable energy which has no harm for environment. The process of energy production from fossil fuel such as oil and gas emit huge amount of fume, dust which instigate the carbon footprint for a country. However, the generating energy from natural resource such as wind and the sunlight has a variety of commercial and industrial uses but it has no carbon emission. For example, Switzerland has planned to replace their motor car fuel with solar electricity by 2030 as part of environment protection. This could ensure progressive living quality with healthy environment.
In conclusion, I do not believe that we have to sacrifice our environment to enhance our living quality
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1335.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2766798419 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9906351356 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581027667984 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5705121484 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.692307692 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4615384615 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136533850167 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549772426497 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536949850838 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10148307445 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648641211714 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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