Some modern artist receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while other struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, the art market seems to develop dramatically. It leads to a consequence that the level of inequality becomes higher between the famous artist who earns a lot of money from their work and others who receive nothing. While there are questions regarding the disparity between artists, I suppose that the government should not interfere with who succeeds or who fails.
An artist's achievement depends on his talent. I believe that talented artists will receive comparable wages for their enduring, persistent devotion and relentless efforts. It is undeniable that famous artists will have "sought-after" works with appreciating prices while those of non-celebrities tend to be left in disgrace. In the arts community, the elimination is harsh. The more effort and creativity you make, the higher your career ladder is. For instance, to make the painting "Dawn on the Farm", the late painter Nguyen Duc Nung had to enter directly to the field to observe the movements of the farmers, recording the brightness, the dark, and the contrast of colors in the space at dawn. Moreover, his art was an honor to be placed in an exhibition in Singapore. The success of the painting is a clear recognition of his dedication.
As far as I concern, the success of an artist also depends on the personal tastes of the public. For example, in the Vietnamese music market, audiences who enjoy lyrical music always express a love for the works of the late composer Trinh Cong Son. In contrast, with young audiences, the vibrant music of Son Tung MTP or Den Vau's raps brought them a new breeze in their souls. Therefore, I think that the success of artists should not be controlled by the government because the audience's specific preferences are special.
The achievement of genuine artists is hard-earned. They should reap the fruit of their labors. On the contrary, those who are not dedicated to the job and without pushing the envelope in work, it is not worthy of public acceptance. In short, I think it is a bit unfair, but the government is not possible to put the true artists in the same league as others who are not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'artists'' or 'artist's'?
Suggestion: artists'; artist's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i suppose, i think, in contrast, in short, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95555555556 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94855059602 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552777777778 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 2.52805611222 435% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2492714383 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8947368421 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143294499266 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402599187042 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334214065572 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0853009918465 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00719229078115 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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