Some parents think its good to have their children mobile phones, others disagree?Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays youngsters are consuming a vast amount of information through media such as the cinema, newspapers, television and most importantly, social-media. Some people opine that violent content displayed on media is making teenagers more delinquent. I do believe media is playing a big part in this and fully agree with this opinion. To that extent, this essay will explore different ways media play a role in exacerbating the problem of juvenile crime.
To begin with, the media promotes illegal and offensive behavior. These days, many movies, TV series and songs seem to celebrate the law-breakers and they depict criminal activities as adventurous and fun As a result, kids are encouraged to break the law and get involved in illegal activities. Recently, there was the news of three young kids on the motor-cycle harassing a policeman because they wanted to record a video of their activity and share it on their social media. Other kids also started to emulate them and it soon became a social trend.
Moreover, Media does not self-censor sensitive content. Videos and news of attacks or killings or other activities, which can have a devastating effect on young minds, are presented without any thought. As a result, youngsters can be psychologically affected by such content and might become more prone to aggressive behavior. As an example, recent videos showing a terrorist group ISIS beheading people on camera disturbed some teenager and they ran away from their homes with the intention of joining the terrorist group in Syria.
In conclusion, Media is promoting aggressive behavior through songs, movies, news, and various other ways. If this trend is not curtailed and corrected in time, it will have many negative effects on society in the long term.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24647887324 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95201388291 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633802816901 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5200080016 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.428571429 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0721392534115 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0241327119623 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0220479930193 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0440948727122 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116803039171 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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