Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior, both on and off the field, can have negative influences.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Although some people believe professional athletes' behaviors, both on and off the field, can negatively impact young people, others think they can serve as a good role model. The following paragraphs will elaborate on these both views and explain why the positive points are more dominant.
Professional athletes are a good sample of individuals who have struggled hard to reach their goals. They managed to cope with their fears, such as failure, while becoming a champion, and almost all of them come from less affluent families, which represents the subject that many children and young people from deprived conditions can reach this prestigious level and prosperity. Therefore, children try to follow these athletes and push hard for their dreams. In addition, some expert athletes hold events to help many charities or fund money for needy people, such as a foundation for children who have cancer, which attracts their followers' attention and teaches them how everyone is responsible for caring for needy individuals.
On the other hand, almost all athletes cooperate with many brands and advertise many products on and off the field, which may increase consumerism and fake needs. For example, football players play in an advertisement that advertises a new model of cell phone, or they wear special clothes during the game that advertises a new brand of shoes. Therefore, their followers try to purchase these new products they may not necessarily need. Additionally, these athletes may have some negative habits outside of the pitch. For example, they may use cigarettes and vapes, which are very harmful to the body, and their followers use these products to be like their role models.
To sum up, almost all professional athletes can be appropriate role models for teenagers and young people, although some may have drawbacks in their on and off-field behaviors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23588039867 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66948018081 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544850498339 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5464410758 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.333333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3357845816 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130218050491 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117367798833 0.0667982634062 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243839718059 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109681477191 0.056905535591 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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