Some people feel that entertainers ( eg. Film stars , pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.Do you agree or disagree?Which other types of job should be highly paid

It is true that, there is a huge gap in the financial gains of the people working in different sectors. Strata of folks believe that famous personalities of the entertainment world are overpaid. I agree with the given statement as they lead a very luxurious and glamarous life. This essay intends to discuss the other processions which deserve to be paid more.
Firstly, their high income is quite evident from the lifestyle which they follow. It is well known that they charge hefty sum of money even for very minor roles. Because majority of the funds goes in the pocket of celebrities, the government fails to provide adequate wages to the ones who are more worthy of it. For instance, authorities spent nearly 10 crores paying to celebrities for the promotion of their party, while the major issues such as unemployment and underpaid doctors remained unresolved. Therefore, film stars can be guided to demand less money , as there are more important problems waiting for monetary grants.
On the contrary, some other professions such as that of army personnels are more eligible for huge salaries. As they sacrifice their family life and spend many months away from home, they are work harder physically and emotionally. Moreover , rather than giving all the attention and respect to movie stars, officials can consider paying teachers more. They are believed to be the nation builders, as they guide the young minds in right direction. As an example, a renowned scientist Dr. Kalam regarded the tutors next to god and supported the idea of paying teachers more wages than that of the stars of film industry.
To conclude, government can make policies to put a limit on the amount of money that should be paid to celebrities. Additionaly, they can divert that extra sum to more deserving strata of the country.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, it is true, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95409836066 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63468990437 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6161386433 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4375 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148513882469 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474838409943 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515008936657 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935373340743 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269914585372 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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